Day 17 of Writing 101: A Day in Verse

Usually, I don’t share my poetry on the blog, because I am presently working on the betterment of my fiction-writing. I have a feeling that I am a better poet than a fiction writer (with no trace of smugness, believe me), but I would like to reverse that.

For today’s task, I looked back in Time and found a poem in one of my Facebook Notes. It was written on 30th December 2011, and titled: Rhapsody on the Bygone Days. I am republishing it without any changes to the original text.

Rhapsody on the Bygone Days

Arpita Pramanick

All the pleasant memories, as the year ends,

Take refuge in debris.

Connections that were made

Faltered the test of time and withered away.

Copious tears shed on paltry feelings,

Have dried on forlorn cheeks.

And yet, as the bitter teeth of Winter recedes

And a glorious Sun rises,

I shall, in the maze of its halo, dream again.

I’ll stare as far as my sight lends,

Into the garden of roses in some faraway place,

Where the first glitter of the Sun dries

The nip of shimmering dews.

I shall fold my hands across my breast

And bury the memories that I made

And feel happy for all that I have.

And those that have left me along the way

I will for once forgive them,

As a sigh heaves out of my heart

(For wounds take a long time to heal)

Yet, I shall pass by the dark shadows

And not let your memories ruin my today

Though I know,

Some things are never to be forgotten

And some scars are to be kept alive.

Though I know

I’ll remember you once again and sob

But not today;

And for once lose myself in the laughter of Life.

If I were re-writing this today, I will probably use more commonplace words than paltry, rhapsody, etc. I am not a native English speaker, so I had most possibly learnt those words in order to write the poem, though I am not sure if I remember it correctly. Now, I am more comfortable in my vocabulary and would like to use plain, conversational English to say something universal. I won’t try too hard to find fancy words to give an impression that I know so many words because now, I have found beauty in simplicity.

What about you? How has your writing evolved over time? Do share with me in the Comments.

Copyright © 2015 Arpita Pramanick


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About Arpita

Arpita Pramanick is a little, young woman with a bright face (who'd rather not look directly into a stranger's eye) you'll find walking on the corridors of Mu Sigma, Inc. She tells herself she wants to be a properly published writer (by which she means she wants to be published from the likes of Penguin), but isn't really so sincere about writing everyday. So if you see her, tell her to go write. She'll love you for doing that!
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26 Responses to Day 17 of Writing 101: A Day in Verse

  1. Jeanne says:

    I thought your poem was lovely.

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  2. belinda o says:

    Lovely. I think the language is just right for this poem, but of course, write what you’re comfortable writing!

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  3. rosemawrites says:

    oh, Arpita. This poem is lovely. I sobbed with your character. Like… the emotions are just so powerful. Nice one, as always!

    As to your question, I am also fond of using too complicated words before. (English isn’t my first language too and I thought using unusual words make my pieces more impressive.) I also opt to write long and run-on sentences. But after I read Elements of Style and On Writing by Stephen King, I have learned to write with simplicity and brevity. 🙂 I am still learning, though. 🙂

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  4. Gina Blue says:

    One thing I brought back from NZ was a plaque which reads, “Don’t let yesterday take up too much of today.” It hangs above the stove in my little kitchen and I read it daily. And today I will “lose myself in the laughter of Life.” Yes! Thanks for sharing your poem.

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  5. susurrus says:

    I’m glad you added the note about your choice of simpler words – a few of the choices are from an earlier time (ironically ‘bygone’ is one). I did notice ‘paltry’ when I was reading – it made me wonder if we can ever say feelings are paltry. I liked the poem, but your writing will be stronger, more deft and subtle for having found beauty in simplicity.

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  6. I like that you would change certain words; I felt they stuck out, too. My writing has changed from copying other writers’ styles to being comfortable with me own.

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  7. Annie says:

    Beautiful words ❤

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  8. BERYL says:

    well-written…made me very nostalgic, not just bcoz it reminded me of my first attempts at writing poems but also bcoz I share your feelings. In fact, I believe, we have all felt this way at some point of time; may be, even, many times 🙂

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